Posted by Trogdor at 6:58am May 2 '13By now I hope most people have read my new erotic tale that is up on the Sex board. I would like to get some critical reviews of it now. While I am interested in hearing if it turned people on, I'd mostly like to hear about the structure.
Were the:
sentences the right length?
paragraphs split up in the right parts?
grammatically correct?
Anything else that would help me write more, hotter, grammatically correct sex stories would be great!
And if you've not yet read it: Fleshy Femme Fatale (its NSFW) or on Literotica where you can vote on it too